高中生英语作文分享-My visit to Changguangxi Park

　　We went to Changguangxi Park for a visit two weeks ago. The scenery there has left a deep impression on me.

　　It was a nice day. The sun was shining brightly and the air was clean and fresh. Upon our arrival, we met with numerous green plants and beautiful trees of all kinds. There were so many beautiful flowers there that I could hardly name them. We sat on the big green lawn, some singing, others talking excitedly. Half an hour had passed by but none of us wanted to leave the soft beautiful lawn. Though someone said we were too tired from studying hard to leave the place, I would rather say that it was because of the attractive scenery. We also enjoyed the food and fruit we had brought with us on the lawn. What a happy scene! The wind was warm, the air was refreshing and the laughter were contagious.

　　The scenery was so attractive that we could hardly take our eyes away from it. We were all lost in such a natural wonder. At long last we had to leave the place reluctantly. On our way back, we were still absorbed in our excitement. Everyone seemed happy and content to have come to this wonderful park and wanted to visit it again in the near future.

　　Teacher’s comments:

　　The writer goes directly to the topic by mentioning who, when, where and what. She follows these elements by vividly describing the beauty of the park and how the students were absorbed in the scenery. She uses so many beautiful words in the writing that it seems to have been written by the teacher. In actual fact, the teacher has only made only a little improvement and modification of the article. Zhu Xinyi can refer to the dictionary to find necessary elements for her writing, which I should recommend to the students of English.

　　指导老师：Wu Rongming (吴荣铭)